When Fillydelphia's parasprite problems prove too much for even Princess Celestia to handle, Filly's Head of the Guard realizes that there is no other alternative, and makes the decision to call in the cavalry: he calls in Pinkie Pie!
Pinkie is to work closely with the Head of the Guard in Fillydelphia to eradicate the parasprite infestation by any means necessary in the now nearly deserted city.
Naturally, things don't go as planned, and what should have been a simple task becomes something much, much more complicated.
The story is framed within the Head of the Guard's letter to Twilight after the incident.
Special thanks to The Only Brony in the Army for editing.
Chapters (5)
love the concept and the story line is pretty well developed but the pacing seems just slightly off to me. It's an entertaining read but it doesn't seem to me that it put enough detail into the locations and the dialogue could use some work. It's a great story, but it could always be greater. Keep writing.
993226
That's the kind of feedback I'm looking for. Thanks for leaving me a comment!
Those are issues I'm aware of, and things that I'll be trying to improve on in the future.
993271 always glad to put in my two bits for aspiring writers. While I don't write anything myself I love to read and as such find that my advice is often surprisingly helpful. Glad I could be of use.
A thought that just Pinkie popped into my mind. Is it possible that parasprites are a subspecies
of tribbles. Somebody call Spock.
As for the pacing being slightly off. What else would happen when Pinkie is involved.
Loved this story. My only disappointment was that I was starting to hope for a sort of romance to blossom between Guy and Prism.
Maybe I've just got too much shipping on the mind. All the same, I really enjoyed reading this.
996368 I'm pretty sure a romance has blossomed- use your imagination and read between the lines
Uhh... Why is an E rated story in an M rated folder? Even more confuzzling is the fact that it has no tentacles, yet is in the "Everypony Loves Tentacles" group... Weird... If you would please remove it? From said group?